[TRAD] Attack on the Sleep Wizard (from Dragão Brasil No.8)

[The Admiral]

My preference would be 'Attack on the Sleep Wizard' as it is in keeping with the original Brazilian title, but I'm happy with either of the other two options.

[Pancho]

I'm not a fan of the word sleep twice in the same title, other than that it could be the way to go.

Edit: in response to lestodantes suggestion, not you Admiral.

[lestodante]

Yes, I also noticed this repetition. So, also for me Attack on the Sleep Wizard is the best title.

[j_dean80]

Attack on the Sleep Wizard is good with me. I like keeping original flavor. Also 'The Rescue' I like as is for the same reason.

[Pancho]

I'm in agreement also. There were some good alternatives suggested but I do like to keep things as close to the originals as possible.

[Pancho]

Hi there, I have now added a conclusion to the main text on page 4 (included below also). Let me know what you think....

Conclusion
After climbing a nearby hill to gain a vantage point over the surrounding lands, you blew mightily upon the Magic Horn, hoping its spell would carry a greater distance. It was not until you returned to the town that you could know for sure that your efforts had been successful. Sure enough, the streets were bustling once more with the usual merchants, farmers, artisans and other townsfolk. On the way up to the castle you passed the tavern, and was is good to hear the same old raucous shouts of revelry, as if the sleep sorcery had never happened.
At the castle the Emperor greeted you warmly and showered you with gratitude for saving the realm once more. He has granted each of you 300 gold coins for defeating the Sleep-Sorcerer, and a further 200 gold coins for the return of his Crown (which may be split between you if desired).
As for Lengrati, he has paid for his crimes by having to himself face the eternal sleep of death! You are now free to return to the tavern and celebrate with the folks whose lives you have saved. Live well my friends, until I call upon you once more...

Mentor

[lestodante]

I like when you say that Lengrati has to face the eternal sleep!!

[The Admiral]

I like it thanks.

Just spotted one error: "and was is good to hear" I think should read "and it was good to hear".

1400 seems quite a hefty reward. Maybe 200 each + 200 for crown. It's all personal taste though and easily personally amended either way to suit.

[Pancho]

Cheers Admiral. Changes have been made in the main text, accordingly.

[lestodante]

So many months without any update!
I did a pdf file with the quest, it is a beta and up to revisions, I had to change a bit the text in quest n. 2 to let it fit in the notes (it was really too long).
http://www.lestodante.com/hq/quests/attack_on_the_sleep-wizard.pdf



Old beta version here: